FFfAW- Clear as a Photograph

Posted: September 1, 2015 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction
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This week’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers prompt was a picture of one of my favourite things: an old steam engine. Even if I didn’t always do these prompts, I definitely would have done this one. You can find the prompt here.

Word Count: 145

This week’s photo prompt is provided by Louise with The Storyteller’s Abode.

She watched as it pulled into the platform in the midst of a cloud of dark steam. The smell of it drifted over them all. It was a real, heavy smell, a smell with substance to it.

The engine was glistening, majestic, full of power and elegance. It commanded attention like a king or an emperor. The coaches behind it glistened as well, their magnificent blood-and-custard liveries catching the sunlight.

There was some dirt and ash, of course. Those small blemishes, black marks here and there, just made it more tangible, more real. It was reality, not fantasy.

Years later, she stands on the platform again. It closed years ago, left to be overgrown by wild things. There is no smell now, no engine. There’s nothing but rusty tracks and memory.

But she closes her eyes and she sees that day, clear as a photograph.

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Comments
  1. Jaden C. Kilmer says:

    old steam engines are just awesome. I spent much of last night reading up on old London subway systems…

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  2. Graham Lawrence says:

    Excellent. Lovely story and nice take on the prompt. “blood and custard liveries” brings back memories to me as well.

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  3. We can find happiness/comfort anywhere if we want to.

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  4. afairymind says:

    Beautiful descriptions – you really bring the railway to life. I’m glad you found my picture so inspiring. 🙂

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  5. Wonderful story! You can tell that you love steam trains by your wonderful imagery and the way you weave your words. Very nice! Thank you for participating in FFfAW Challenge.

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  6. mandibelle16 says:

    Everything has a time, and the end of that trains time came. Wonderful story.

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  7. milliethom says:

    Some lovely, evocative writing here. You conjure up well the sight, sounds and smells of that great majestic beast. I have lots of memories of standing on stations, watching huge steam engines pull in, when I was younger, and your story stirred my own memories. Thank you for that.

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  8. Very descriptive. And I enjoyed the train being the focus and not just the “vehicle” for another, different story.

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  9. I love it. So real and evocative.

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  10. luckyjc007 says:

    Nice descriptive story, especially mentioning the small blemishes that made it more tangible, more real..And, ending it with an impression of what she was feeling when visualizing what use to be.

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