FFfAW- Race the Dawn

Posted: September 15, 2015 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction
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I see horses and hats and my mind immediately leaps to Westerns, one of the best (and sadly almost extinct) film genres. Naturally, that was the sort of feel I tried to convey in my story for this week’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The original prompt can be found here.

This week’s photo prompt is provided by Scott, author of the blog, Scott’s Place

Word Count: 145

He examined the horses carefully. He’d long learned to tell a good horse from a bad one. His winnings had been a testament to that.

“Johnny?” Sally called out, barefoot and in her night dress. “What are you doing’ lookin’ at horses at this hour?”

“Which one would you say’s the fastest?” Johnny asked.

“Reckon that’d be Lightning,” Sally replied, pointing to a white stallion. “But you didn’t answer my question.”

“I’m afraid that I haven’t been entirely truthful with you.” Johnny pulled out a pistol, the barrel gleaming in the moonlight.

“You’re my husband,” Sally protested. “Preacher said so.”

Johnny shrugged. “Been a lot of women’s husband. Easiest way to get to the silver.”

He picked up a bag, then mounted the white stallion.

“Was any of it real?” Sally asked, blinking back tears.

“You’ll never know.”

Then he was gone, racing the dawn.

  1. What a low down dirty rotten scoundrel! Great story! Maybe Lightening will dump him somewhere between there and wherever it is he’s going. LOL! I really enjoyed this story. I agree, I kind of miss being able to watch Westerns! Thank you for participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge!

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  2. Joy Pixley says:

    “You’ll never know.” Ouch! Killer goodbye line.

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  3. mandibelle16 says:

    How sad for the woman and many other woman, that all he wants is their silver. Great job!

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  4. luckyjc007 says:

    What a shock for her to find that he was just using her to get a horse! That’s worse than being left for another woman! It provides a very good story though….I enjoyed it. 🙂

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  5. That is so mean. I hope her father is the Sheriff and he doesn’t get away this time…

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  6. Ooh what a nasty man, such a shame he can get away with it. Great writing.

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  7. Oh snap! “You’ll never know.” XD I ❤ that. Wow, do I love that. Genius! A no-good scoundrel, but a genius nonetheless. Thanks for such an entertaining read

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  8. Mel A Rowe says:

    What a jaw-dropping ending! Nice work.

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