FFfAW– Morning

Posted: January 19, 2016 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction, Uncategorized
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Word Count: 146

Mornings were always Neil’s favorite times, when the sun’s golden-red rays danced across sand and along the wine-dark waves.

He wandered by the side of the sea, the gentle sound of the waves forming a pleasant melody.

That was when he saw her, standing by the water’s edge.

She was beautiful: eyes like glistening stars, skin like glowing moon, hair like spun gold.

Her gaze fell upon Neil and she smiled at him. In a moment, he fell in love.

Then a wind swept in from the east, throwing up clouds of golden sand. Neil raised an arm to shield his eyes. When he lowered it again, she was gone, like a dream when the morning comes.

Again and again, he walked the shore of the beach, morning and evening, searching for a sign of the morning maiden, but he never so much as glimpsed her.

This is my entry for this week’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Thanks to Priceless Joy for running it and to Louise of The Storyteller’s Abode for providing the prompt image!


  1. mandibelle16 says:

    Mysterious. He’ll never see her again I doubt. Great piece.

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  2. It must be horrible to fall in love with an apparition! Maybe it was a mermaid. 🙂 Wonderful story – I enjoyed reading it!

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  3. Sonya says:

    I love all the colours, you made me see it all as if I’d watched it. Good stuff 🙂

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  4. Jenn says:

    A fairy tale! I think she’ll come back and whisk him away to her underwater wonderland!

    Great story!

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  5. Creepy. Hope she’s not a spirit that haunts. Love your take on the prompt. 😃

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  6. Jon Stephens says:

    Poor guy! A dream? A hope? A promise?

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  7. afairymind says:

    I hope he someday finds her again. A lovely story, beautifully described. I like your use of ‘wine-dark’ to describe the waves – very Homeric! The use of such an ancient poetic device heightens the sense of mystery, giving the tale an almost mythical quality. 🙂

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  8. Alixa says:

    Love your story! Their paths crossed for such a short time, but it was enough to make him fall for her. Well done 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  9. Susan says:

    Beautiful poetic descriptive story of an apparition, imagination, mermaid? Who knows? Great story. 🙂

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