FFftPP –The Plan

Posted: May 4, 2016 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction
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Moonlight shone down on the barren, wind-swept desert. There was nothing to be seen for miles but two men with sacks flung over their shoulders, making their way carefully across the land. One of them – Carlson, old and grey – led with a map, while the other –young, tall Grant – held up a lantern for them to see by. At last, Carlson clapped his hands together and they came to a stop. Carlson looked at Grant expectantly.

“Didn’t you bring a shovel?” Carlson asked.

“I thought you were bringing the shovel,” Grant replied.

Carlson rolled his eyes. “I brought the lantern, the brush, and the map. You were supposed to bring the water and the shovel.”

There was a pause.

“You forgot the water as well, didn’t you?” Carlson let out an exasperated sigh. “What actually is in that bag of yours?”

Grant’s feet crunched in the sand. “Nothing.”


“Well, I figured we’d need space to bring back the gold.”

“And how,” Carlson asked, “are we going to bring back the gold without a shovel? Or survive when the sun rises and we have nothing to drink?”

Grant gave a slow nod. “It’s possible,” he admitted, “that I didn’t entirely think this through.”

Word Count: 198

This is my entry for this week’s Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner. Thanks to rogershipp for running the challenge! Photo is from pixabay.com.

  1. Lynn Love says:

    Haha! Great take on the prompt. Love the dialogue between the too – the more intelligent thief compared to the less so. You’ve paced things nicely too, putting nods and descriptions of action just in the right places to give the dialogue more impact. Nicely done 🙂

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  2. swritings says:

    Haha! Grant finally gets it! 😀 Enjoyed the conversation! Nice take on the prompt! 🙂

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  3. maria says:

    Hahaha! I enjoy reading this very much! Great take on the prompt. And that last line… What a laugh. 😀

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  4. Graham Lawrence says:

    That made me chuckle! Enjoyable read.

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  5. afairymind says:

    Oh dear! He definitely didn’t think it through!

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  6. Brilliant take on the prompt 🙂 thoroughly enjoyable little tale.


  7. mandibelle16 says:

    I enjoyed hour humerous take. If you’re treasure hunting in the desert, you’d hope they’d remember the basics — a shovel and water. Lol. Great write!

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  8. Grant wl never be a gold digger that’s for sure! Nice one.

    Here is my FFftPP

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  9. luckyjc007 says:

    LOL’s 🙂 It sounds very human…I can see it actually happening in real life! Grant just had another lesson in life. 🙂

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