FFfAW – Desired Response

Posted: May 9, 2016 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction, Uncategorized
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Stan had always loved his car. He thought it was bold, daring, creative, and, in his own words “the sort of thing that gets noticed in a crowd.” It had been his dad’s first, a rusty old thing that scarcely worked, but a few parts had seen to that. An artist friend and some cans of spray paint had seen to the rest. He’d paid that friend more money than he’d ever earned before: twelve dollars and a sandwich.

Then Stan had his car: a brave artistic statement. He was certain that it would open doors. Preferably, the doors of attractive women’s houses.

Sadly, it failed to meet his expectations. The large pink-lensed sunglasses didn’t seem to do the trick either and the goatee was very disappointing.

Still, even when he’d given up on those, he kept the car as it was. He liked it, even if nobody else did.

Word Count: 150

This is my entry for this week’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Thanks to Priceless Joy for running the challenge and to S. Writings for the photo prompt.

  1. Michael says:

    Oh I like it because what could you do with a car such as this that failed to attract to ladies…good thing he did like it though…..

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  2. maria says:

    I hope he continues to drive the car around. Who knows? The right girl haven’t seen it yet. 😀

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  3. I agree with Maria. The right girl just hasn’t seen it yet and I think the car makes quite a statement! “Look at me! I’m your guy!” LOL! Cute story!!

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  4. Sonya says:

    I bet he’ll find someone who digs his car. Eventually… “He’d paid that friend more money than he’d ever earned before: twelve dollars and a sandwich.” – great line 🙂

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  5. Graham Lawrence says:

    I agree it was a great car. I would have parked it out front, where everybody could admire it!

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  6. Great story. I laughed at Stan’s goal to attract the ladies. He should hang in there; the car’s a winner 🙂

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  7. Joy Pixley says:

    I agree with the others — Stan just hasn’t shown it to the right woman yet. Seems to me that a car like that would be a good litmus test, to see if the woman was enough like him to be worth meeting!

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  8. Somebody out there is bound to like it… I hope he lost the sunglasses though 🙂

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  9. mandibelle16 says:

    Funny, how he would think it would attract woman. Nonetheless, it’s a very authentic car.

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  10. swritings says:

    ‘He liked it, even if nobody else did.’…. Perfect ending! I like his attitude towards life! 🙂

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  11. afairymind says:

    I agree with everyone who’s said that he’s just not met the right woman yet. Eventually a girl will come along who loves the car and him along with it. 🙂 Good story.

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  12. Well he must have looked really colourful for the ladies 🙂

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