Friday Fictioneers – Hold Them at the Bridge

Posted: August 10, 2016 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction
Tags: , , , , , , , , , ,


The thin wooden platform stretched out before the duo, spanning the steep ditch. It was too small for more than two people to cross side-by-side.

“I can take two by myself,” Kor said, swinging his blade and trying to seem more confident than he was. “Easy.”

“Aye,” Krimhilda muttered, not feeling so optimistic. “The first two. And maybe the two after that.”

She looked out at the far side of the bridge where they swarmed, armor glinting like beetle shells, spears and axes clattering.

“But what about the other five hundred?”

They stood, waiting for the onslaught to begin.

Word Count: 99

This is for Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for running the challenge and Adam Ickes for the photo prompt!

  1. Dear J.A.

    You leave the reader with a sense of dread and anticipation. Nicely done.



    Liked by 1 person

  2. neilmacdon says:

    I liked the armor glinting like beetle shells

    Liked by 1 person

  3. gahlearner says:

    Great scene, very grippng. I hope they can send a signal, ring bells, light a fire…getting reinforcements.

    Liked by 1 person

  4. iainthekid says:

    Nice story. Makes me want to learn more about how they ended up in this situation and what will happen next! Best, Iain

    Liked by 1 person

  5. michael1148humphris says:

    This is rather apt when the Olympic’s is on, seen the marathon runner for reinforcements.

    Liked by 1 person

  6. MrBinks says:

    Well told.

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Lynn Love says:

    What a very clearly drawn and described tale. I can see them now, standing, waiting, ready to hold firm as long as they’re capable. Liked the different voices – one over confident, the other realistic. Very good story 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  8. Sandra says:

    Lovely story, I too liked the glinting beetle shells.

    Liked by 1 person

  9. ceayr says:

    Spartans with funny names.
    Nicely done.

    Liked by 1 person

  10. maria says:

    Ah, I found this nostalgic. My siblings and I used to watch out for snails in our rice fields back then. It’d be a contest at the end on who gets the most number of snails. Lovely take, JA!

    Liked by 1 person

  11. Most folks deal with the concept of one at a time, these two conceptualize two at a time and then try to figure out how to handle 500. Hmmm. Good luck.

    Liked by 1 person

    • Thanks to the bridge, they do only have to take two at a time. But all it takes is one to get lucky or for them to get tired. They’ll certainly need that good luck! Thanks for commenting!


  12. Al says:

    Reminds me of Gimli and Legolas 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  13. I always say, “Go down swinging.” Good tale.

    Liked by 1 person

  14. Ashley Danielle says:

    Oh boy, I want to know if they survive! Well done!

    Liked by 1 person

  15. Stating and waiting the inevitable! Stoic realism!

    Liked by 1 person

  16. You did a good job of building a feeling of danger in so few words.

    Liked by 1 person

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )


Connecting to %s