Screeching horns. Crashing metal on metal. Squealing tires. Glass splintering in spider-webs of shards.

And over it all, the thunder of gunfire and the smell of gunpowder.

After, they sit on the curb, staring at the wreck of the car: windows blown out, tires flat, mirrors snapped off like old branches.

“Could have been worse,” Aaron says, taking a long draw from his cigarette.

“Car’s a wreck,” Dave says, cradling his bloodstained arm. “I’ve got a bullet in me. How could it be worse?”

“Could be dead.” Aaron stands. “Come on. Job’s not done yet.”

Word Count: 95

This is for Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for running the challenge and providing the photo prompt! 

  1. JS Brand says:

    Very tight writing and dialogue. Good take on the prompt.

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice action scene, straight out of a film.

    Liked by 1 person

  3. Exciting! I like your style. 🙂

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  4. Joy Pixley says:

    I second Iain’s comment — this has such a vivid visual vibe to it, like a great action scene from a movie. Complete with the witty comment by the fearless protagonist, even!

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  5. Good one. I like his optimism and never-die attitude!

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  6. Dale says:

    Very Hollywoodian! And there is that. Could be dead.

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  7. k rawson says:

    Cinematic and tense!

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  8. michael1148humphris says:

    Sharp and pithy, you told us what we needed to know.

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  9. It can always get worse. :o)

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  10. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    Nice face paced scene. Love the nonchalant attitude from Aaron.

    Liked by 1 person

  11. Michael Wynn says:

    This one really took the reader with it, well written

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