From the Mountains She Comes

Posted: May 15, 2017 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction
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They whisper of her, as they have whispered for six years of watchful peace. To some, she is a legend. To others, she is as real as the scars on their faces, the ruin of their lands, the screams that echo still as they try to sleep at night.

But now, though it is spring and the sun should be bright in the midday sky, dark clouds are drifting in. The wind grows chill and icicles form upon the leaves of trees. Children laugh as the snow settles on the ground, sprouting flowers covered in a blanket of crystalline white. They do not remember.

Horns sound from the mountains and the swift horses tear through the fresh-fallen snow. Above a great multitude in mail and fur flies the flag of the White Lion, billowing in the wind she has made.

They whisper no more.

The Winter Queen has returned.

Word Count: 149

This is for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Thanks to Priceless Joy for running the challenge and Ioniangraphics for providing the prompt photo!

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    I couldn’t help but think of the Snow Queen from Narnia while reading this – no bad thing! Good writing.

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  2. Excellent writing.

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  3. Wonderful story, J.A.! Very poignant. The Winter’s Queen returns and destroys the spring!

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  4. James says:

    The first thing to pop into my mind was “The Frost Giant’s Daughter” by Robert E. Howard. Classic pulp fiction.

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  5. mandibelle16 says:

    Powerful rice. The winter Queen personifying the horror of winter or like the Snow Wuern in Narnia. Either way her coming is frightening and that can be felt in your writing, a sense of terror.

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  6. michael1148humphris says:

    Loved the images that you created. This is my kind of story,

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  7. Joy Pixley says:

    I really enjoyed the fairy tale / legendary feel to this one. You built up what they had forgotten so well and then… there she is! (i kept thinking, “I’m ba-a-a-a-ack” but that’s not quite in keeping.)

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  8. jupitermagic says:

    wow ! love this !written just like classic tales !

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  9. What is it with Winter Queens? You’d think of all people, they could just chill out. πŸ˜›

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  10. milliethom says:

    Superbly evocative writing J.A. Very well done!

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  11. I love this. I wrote from a similar feeling.
    The Snow
    Annie at ~McGuffy’s Reader~

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  12. Singledust says:

    the force of winter – stunning

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  13. Quite evocative. I hope she’s not too cold in her regal arrival.

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