Roger sighed. He had been promised gold, but all he’d seen were enough rocks to last him a lifetime and an expanse of cold, grey-green ocean.
After hours of searching the rugged shorelines of the islands, treasure still seemed to be in short supply.
He turned to Marie, who was scrutinizing the worn fragments of map with pursed lips and furrowed brow.
“Time to turn back, I think,” he said. “Storm’s coming in.”
Marie shook her head. “No. My great-grandfather’s treasure is out here somewhere.”
“He probably spent it all on rum,” Roger said. “I know I would. My point isβ”
“There!” Marie pointed. “That’s it! Raven’s Point.”
The outcrop was just like the shape on the map: a rough outline of a raven’s beak extending over the waters.
And beneath, there was a cave.
Marie smiled.
“Full speed ahead.”
Word Count: 140
This is for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Thanks to Priceless Joy for running the challenge and Louise for providing the photo prompt!
I love nautical stories –
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Great treasure hunt story! Loved the spin you gave the prompt! Hope they find the treasure!
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Wow! Success at last!
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Persistence pays off. Thanks for commenting!
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I wouldn’t mind finding myself some treasure too! Great story!
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Me neither. Thank you!
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Love it the excitement that the treasure can be found
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Its after a long time I read a TH story. Great narration.
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A great TH story. Good one, Martin.
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Time to get the gold. Wonderful.
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Why is there ALWAYS rum!
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And why does it always disappear? π
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A nice throwback to pirate adventure – I would like to read the story of their great-grandfather and how the treasure came to be at Raven’s Point!
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Thank you! That would be an interesting story…
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I would love to see Roger’s reaction if they find the cave empty. Good, fun little adventure tale this one is.
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Thank you! He probably wouldn’t be too happy β though I think Marie would be more disappointed.
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A treasure story! Nice.
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Yea! Fantastic – go get it! Brilliant little tale and I love it.
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Roger makes for a pretty impatient treasure hunter — searching for something that’s been hidden for decades and he expects to find it, what, in the first five minutes? I hope Marie didn’t promise him half of her rightful bounty!
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He doesn’t seem quite cut out for the line of work. I’d say he doesn’t deserve more than 10%, at most. π
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You’re generous, I think. But it sounds like Marie likes him, so maybe he’s worth 10% to her. π
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And the treasure would be stuck like the diamond in the cave/blowhole like in the Rescuers – Penny being forced to go into and get the Devils Eye!
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Maybe. I remember that movie.
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Great story. I’ve always wanted to go on a real treasure hunt.
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Thank you! While a treasure hunt sounds fun in theory, I’d probably end up bored as Roger by a few hours in.
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Probably true, but it sounds like a fun adventure.
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Very neat tale. Makes me think of the movie ‘Fools Gold’ with Kate Hudson and Matthew McConaughey. I hope they are able to get the treasure before the tide fills the cave or something like that. It’s what I picture anyways π
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Thank you! I think I saw that film.
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Yeah it wasn’t their best film but still entertaining π
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The finish made me smile. Hope they got the treasure π
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Thank you! So do I.
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