One Call

Posted: July 26, 2017 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction
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Dirty tile and cold walls surrounded her as she dialed the number, black phone pressed to her ear. She ignored the dirt and ash, just like she ignored the foul stench that hovered in every room like a vulture.

The phone clicked and her heart leapt.

“Who is this?”

“John,” she whispered. “I–”

“I told you not to call.”

“I’m sorry.”

“It’s too late for that.”

The line went dead. She stood there, cradling the phone, unable to step away.

Outside the tiny prison window, the world spread out, so close but so far beyond her reach.

Word Count: 97

This is for Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for running the challenge and J Hardy Carroll for the photo prompt!

  1. neilmacdon says:

    There’s a big story in there

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  2. Very atmospheric. Could taste the ash and regret.

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Devastating prose, both in her fate and his rejection of her. Well done.

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  4. The rejection. 😦 Well done, you do a great job of involving the senses.

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  5. Fluid Phrase says:

    Speaks much more than the 98 words here. So much more for us to think and imagine. Very well written.

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  6. Lynn Love says:

    So close and yet so far – how true. What a strange feeling of dislocation there must be between prisoners and the world. There’s a prison in Manchester – Strangeways – right in the middle of a lot of busy roads, industrial units, business and trade going on right outside, but the inmates may as well be on an island for all they can interact with the folk of the city. Nicely done

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  7. Her feeling of isolation is palpable. A sorrowful tale indeed.

    Click to read my FriFic

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  8. Liz Young says:

    I hope she makes a new life when she gets out.

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  9. Mike says:

    Powerful writing

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  10. granonine says:

    Oh my. “Too late”–words of doom. Great take.

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  11. I’m inclined to say, “jerk!” But really we need to hear the whole tale. You’ve crafted a great opening hook.

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