Steam fogged the man’s round glasses. For an hour, he’d stared at Hannah from across the room.
She turned from the register to Jill, who was twisting a strand of her hair around her finger like it was the only thing in the universe.
“Cover for a minute.”
“Uh huh,” Jill murmured.
Hannah stormed over to the man. “What are you looking at?”
“If I knew what you were, I wouldn’t be looking.”
“What I am?”
“You’re not human,” he said. “Not with an aura like that. Like the smell of fresh stardust or the colour of heartbreak.”
Hannah sighed. “So you’re just crazy. Of course you are.”
“You didn’t know.” Swirling eyes like nebulae glistened behind his glasses. “I am terribly sorry.”
“Just crazy,” she muttered.
She ignored the feeling of a thousand fluttering butterflies in her blood and the whispering song of an endless sea in her head.
Word Count: 150
This is for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Thanks to Priceless Joy for running the challenge and shivamt25 for providing the prompt photo!
Swirling eyes like nebulae. Love those lines.
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She’s about to get a shock when he tells her the truth, I think!
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Definitely. Thanks for commenting!
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I saw a made-to-TV scifi show once where aliens could be seen for who they truly were by wearing special glasses. I was kind of hoping his glasses would do the trick for her.
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Perhaps they do the trick for him 😉 Thanks for commenting!
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Beautiful metaphor to describe his eyes and it’s an interesting meet-cute and another wonderful metaphor describing her butterflies at the end of the piece. Really well written. Concise yet so descriptive and full of great images.
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Wonderful story! It makes me wonder if they are falling in love inspite of her angry words!
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Thank you! Perhaps.
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Love the imagery in this story. Well done
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Beautifully written and a delightful read.
Click to read my FFfAW
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This is great! It takes an alien to know one…
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Thank you! That it does.
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So much ambiguity with just enough to anchor it to pull you forward. Nicely done.
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Liked it … a lot.
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Mine: https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/09/30/1-shade-of-amber/
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