Wishing for Far Away Things

Posted: February 21, 2018 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction
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Seeds scatter on the breeze, a storm of white. All that is left is the stem, clutched between her fingers.

She wonders how far the seeds will go. If they’ll just fall to the ground a few feet away or if the wind will catch them, bearing them off to unfamiliar skies.

She wonders if any of them will go as far as him.

“Home,” she whispers, an echo of her wish. “Come home.”

And in the sky, she sees the seeds still dancing on, carried out over the treetops and the roofs, out into the open expanse of blue.


Word Count: 100

This is for Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for running the challenge and Marie Gail Stratford for providing the prompt photo!

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Comments
  1. Anita says:

    Very poetic.
    Hope the seeds make it to him and fetch him home to her…

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  2. James says:

    Maybe he’ll get the message.

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  3. jillyfunnell says:

    I am sure one or two will reach him somehow.

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  4. Michael says:

    I can really imagine this, lovely story

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  5. Joy Pixley says:

    Beautiful description. I hope her wish comes true.

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  6. yarnspinnerr says:

    Unique write. Dispersal of seeds is such a natural miracle.

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  7. Dale says:

    That was a lovely write. Hopefully her wishing will bear fruit.

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  8. granonine says:

    A sweet story like this deserves a happy ending 🙂

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  9. pennygadd51 says:

    You’ve written a lovely story that knits together beautiful images, the natural wonder of seed dispersal and echoes of childish superstition to add poignancy to the longing of your main character. You’ve done that really well.

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  10. So poetic. In India, there’s a very old poem in Sanskrit called Meghaduta or Meghadootam, which literally means The Cloud Messenger. It is about a man asking a passing cloud to become his messenger and take his message to his wife, who lives far away. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Meghad%C5%ABta

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  11. britlight says:

    So poignant. Well written.

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