An Artist Inside the Painting

Posted: February 20, 2019 by J.A. Prentice in Flash Fiction
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Glass roses sung like wind chimes in the morning breeze, crystalline stems trembling. The sun shone a brilliant gold and the cloud-marbled sky gleamed.

A bee buzzed by, clockwork wings carrying a wire-striped body, and alighted on long needle legs. In the sky the birds circled, watching with glinting eyes and knife-sharp beaks.

And in the crooked tower upon the hill, the metal man watched his creation unfold, his long copper fingers tapping like a typewriter. On his world he had been alone, an outcast in a world made of meat.

Here, in this wonderland he had made, he belonged.

Word Count: 100

This is for Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for running the challenge and providing the prompt photo!

  1. I hope, for his sake, that it’s to his liking in ways that count. Those other worlds can be nasty

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  2. granonine says:

    How surprising and unusual! I had to read it through again, because I went too fast the first time and missed important parts. Descriptive, beautiful, and somewhat melancholy.

    “A world made of meat.” A different perspective, indeed.

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Like a scene from a fairytale. Nice one.

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  4. lisarey1990 says:

    Very descriptive. Beautiful writing.

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  5. Dear J.A.

    I could relate to the artist inside his own world. Lovely descriptions.



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  6. Lovely descriptive writing of a ‘God’ and his creation.

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  7. Sandra says:

    A world made of meat… now you put it like that… I can see he’s happier now.

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  8. Totally contented in a world of his own making. Excellent.

    Click to read my FriFic tale!

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  9. Wonderful imagery and creative piece!

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  10. pennygadd51 says:

    You’ve created something beautiful, haunting, and more than a little disquieting with this story. The sharpness of your description lifts the story to the level of art. “An outcast in a world made of meat” is a wonderful phrase!
    Wow! Well done!

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  11. 4963andypop says:

    Wow very good. The word clockwork at first did not seem to belong: it had me perplexed, wondering how to compare the bee’s wings to the mechanics of a clock–until i realized you were being literal! “A world made of meat” is golden.

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