When she closes her eyes, she can still hear the drip of the transfusion, can feel the needle piercing her skin. She muttered for them to stop, but they kept going, pressing on with their violation.
Their blood is in her veins now, pumping through her heart like a poison. She thinks she can feel it, a wrongness inside her.
The room reeks of garlic. The little dutchman has put it everywhere. He has a killer’s eyes. He will kill her, if she lets him.
An old wolf howls, out in the night, and she feels its pain.
This is for Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for running the challenge and Dale Rogerson for providing the prompt photo!
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Dear Joshua,
There’s a hollow sense of evil to this tale. Is Lucy a vampire? I’m a little confused.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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The story is a take on Dracula. Lucy Westenra is Dracula’s victim in the novel. Van Helsing (the “little dutchman”) tries to save her through blood transfusions and putting garlic around her room, but Dracula keeps coming and feeding on her. Lucy dies, but comes back as a vampire. Van Helsing and co kill her by stabbing her through the heart and cutting off her head.
I wanted to do the story from a different perspective. In retrospect I should have made it easier to understand for readers who aren’t familiar with the original.
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Ah. Thank you for the explanation. I’m lacking in my knowledge of Dracula. 😉
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Straight out of Dracula. Excellent.
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Very Gothic
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Ah, Dracula!
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Yes. I realize now I didn’t make it clear enough, but I’m glad some people have picked up on it.
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Haunting and descriptive!
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A dark tale indeed which became clearer after reading your reply to Rochelle’s comment!
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Thanks! I feel like I should have included the content of that comment in the post from the start.
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Poor Van Helsing! “The little dutch man” indeed.😂 Enjoyed this neat turnabout perspective, J. A.!
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So glad I read your response to Rochelle which helped confirm what I thought. This was a wonderful perspective!
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Thanks! I really should put that in the post…
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Nah… It’s okay when your reader have to work a little
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Excellent prose passage. Nice spin on the Bram Stoker tale.
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You’re welcome.
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Spooky, haunting tale!
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Wow, what a chilling tale!
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The explanation you gave Rochelle was most helpful. I don’t think I’ve ever read the original. I probably should 🙂
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Thanks! It’s definitely an interesting book, especially given its legacy.
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We all cry for Lucy and feel her pain as a victim, tormented by both her seducer and her saviour.
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A haunting story, very disturbing and well told. It has a feminist re-imagining feel to it, which I like even if the subject is cringe-worthy.
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A haunting take on an old story. Well done.
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Very creepy and slightly mysterious.
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